The intro was death to this song.
I did listen to the whole thing.
But it wasn't terrible. I have to say though 1:14 was my favorite part (When they repeat the same words over and over again it kind of gets irritating and hard to want to keep going.) The echo of the first part of the main part (once it finally came in) Also was a little annoying.
Suggestions!:
House is a genre I have a hard time with, because I know so little about it. But I do know that this is a little slow, the main saw bass is a little loud and drowns out a lot of other sounds, so leveling out would be good.
A good idea would be to make a instrumental to follow the lyrics, instead of a kind of down slow paced part with not much action going on, ye know?
A little faster would be nice, and make the kick a little more pronounced, right now it's like a dead little fwum fwum, which is kind of hard to make out sometimes with the rest of the stuff going on (like that super loud bass saw)
There is no part in this where the whole part of the lyrics plays, it's just little snippits, which isn't like terrible or anything, just kind of disappointing. And going back to my suggestion about an instrumental part of the melody, with a really electronic sounding piano that would be awesome, along side the lyrics, that would do great.
Great start anyway, good job :)